Computer-draft one
Computers are playing an important role in our daily life. They have already been widely used at home as well as in industries. It help us to do anything without myself such as washing machines, TV sets, DVD players, other electrical machines, and so on. We also use them to play on-line games listen to music for entertainment. We can say that we cannot do without them in our daily lives. Nevertheless, computers are also help us to get new and more information as soon as possible. Without computers, this world would simply be unimaginable.
The personal computer has become an indispensable tool. It takes only a few hours to learn to use the computer. I have a liking for computers that it can get the information all subjects. The most important element of the computer is to store and retrieve the information we need. Besides the two reasons, I think computers are very convenient to talk with each others on the Internet and do not time constraint. To be sure, the personal computer has become a very good companion we can't do without.
The personal computer has become an indispensable tool. It takes only a few hours to learn to use the computer. I have a liking for computers that it can get the information all subjects. The most important element of the computer is to store and retrieve the information we need. Besides the two reasons, I think computers are very convenient to talk with each others on the Internet and do not time constraint. To be sure, the personal computer has become a very good companion we can't do without.

2 Comments:
"It help us to do anything without myself such as washing machines,"
→myself改成ourselves
不過這一句前後看還是不太搭,前面提到機器使人不用親自去作某些事,後面卻提到TV sets,DVD players等,這些可以換成別的像是洗衣機,烘碗機等
"We also use them to play on-line games listen to music for entertainment. "
play games 和listen music中間要加連接詞
they have been 不要already
it help(s)
online games(,)listen to..
we cannon do (anything) without..
get new(s)
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