Monday, February 26, 2007

Tips for staying healthy-Draft one

There is nothing complicated about eating a proper diet. For good health, eat a variety of foods. Do not eat the same foods day after day! Foods should be selected everyday from each of 'basic four.' They are the four groups of food essential to proper nutrition: the milk group, meat group, vegetable-fruit group, and bread-cereal group, Your body will then be supplied with all the nutrients it requires; they are water, minerals, carbohydrate, fats and oils, proteins, and vitamins. A person's diet is determined by his attitudes, likes and dislikes. If you eat foods from each of the basic four groups each day, you will have a balanced diet.

5 Comments:

At 7:41 PM , Blogger 郭包子 said...

eat a variety of foods
這裡的food不用加s
They are the four groups of food essential to proper nutrition: the milk group,為什麼這裡要用冒號?
結論句…有點偏離主題吧!

 
At 4:50 AM , Blogger 飛奇 said...

感覺內容跟題目有點偏離...或許可以加些句子來連接題目和本文~~
ex:there are some tips for staying healthy, one of them is ...

 
At 10:28 PM , Blogger 平井" said...

寫的不錯...可是結尾跟主題好像不太合
就像ciaoyun說的,可以加些相關的句子來連接
ex:If you have these balanced diets, you can get the physical health. 這樣也許會比較好

 
At 12:09 AM , Blogger GIGI said...

eat a variety of foods→ eat a varied foods

 
At 7:02 AM , Blogger :V,瀞 ”婷* said...

後面怎麼講起吃的來了?
改一下ㄅ。偏題摟

 

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